Real writers go commando ([info]sparrohawk) wrote in [info]pornish_pixies,

SHORT: Faceless, Severus/??

Title: 'Faceless'
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Severus/??
A/N: Written for the First Time Challenge.


Severus stared at the floor, as if trying to memorize the texture of the stone, the pattern of cracks and grooves. The pain was subsiding, at last, but that only made him more aware of the scrape of the stone against his knees and the utter, freezing embarrassment of being naked like this.

Naked, and fucked up the arse by someone he couldn't even see.

Masked. The man was masked like all the others, and somehow having it happen this way was worse by far than if he'd been able to see which Death Eater's cock was up him. He bit his lower lip and tried not to think about it. Virtually impossible, since whomever it was back there was no lightweight, and his thrusts shook Severus's too-thin frame and made him gasp. With every sound he made--was forced to make--he felt his blush go deeper, felt more exposed, more vulnerable. The ring of masked and robed figures around them shuffled and muttered. Every so often, Severus fancied he could hear one of them stifle a laugh.

God damn Lucius Malfoy to the fieriest pit of Hell.

Not really his fault, though. Severus hadn't told him. How could he? There was Lucius, golden and perfect, and--he still couldn't believe it--coming on to him. To him, the skinny, the ugly, the pale and greasy git. How could Severus refuse? And why would he want to? And then, after they'd started experimenting a little, how was he supposed to tell Lucius he was a virgin? It would make him look like an idiot, like a child. He was nearly nineteen, after all, and he was quite sure Lucius hadn't been a virgin at nineteen. Or probably at sixteen.

Everybody would have wanted him--women and men alike. Probably even the bloody house elves. Lucius could have had his pick, Severus was sure. And he was sure Lucius had taken his pick. Often.

Which really begged the question of why he'd chosen Severus. Not that it mattered, now. Now, he was on his knees on the floor, losing his virginity to some nameless, faceless figure. Being fucked in the center of a group of Death Eaters, feeling like some kind of whore, like some kind of animal as another man's cock moved inside him. The fact that the movement was beginning to spark more pleasure than pain only made him feel more on display. He gritted his teeth and pressed his fingertips against the floor.

It was Lucius's fault, because Lucius had brought him here, had convinced him of the utter rightness of the cause, had stood by his side when he took the Mark. And where the hell was Lucius now? He'd conveniently disappeared when discussion of the ritual had begun. No way to know where he'd gone to, and Severus tried not to care.

He felt his assailant's movements slow, and was shocked when a warm hand wrapped around his cock. His hips arched into the touch involuntarily, and he really shouldn't have done that because that motion drew the cock further out of his arse and the man behind him gave a grunt and shoved it back in, hard.

It hurt, but something else happened, too, and it made even the pain feel like pleasure. That cock brushed against some part of him that made his vision go white, made his mouth drop open with a huff of breath. There was more laughter, on the edges of his awareness, but he found he didn't care, because now the hand was moving faster, and the cock was bumping that spot on every stroke, and his arse wasn't burning any more or at least not in a bad way, more like a stretch, a pleasurable stretch that made him feel so full, so filled, so fuck...

"Fuck." It was the only coherency that made it through his lips in the train of sounds that attended his orgasm. His back was arched and his body bowed, and his lips were pulled back in a grimace. He found himself looking down between his own arms, watching his prick jerk and spill the long pearly strands of come across the stone. Slender, pale fingers gripped him, milking the last of his climax from him, almost tenderly...

Slender, pale fingers. And on the third finger, a silver ring, in the shape of a serpent, bearing the Malfoy crest.
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  • 23 comments

[info]not_sally

January 26 2004, 04:32:08 UTC 8 years ago

Wow.
Just, wow.

[info]sharp_tongue

January 26 2004, 04:38:29 UTC 8 years ago

Snape and Malfoy are my dirty, guilty pleasure. Sooooo good, soooo bad. Mmm...

This just was delicious. Give us more!

[info]gmth

January 26 2004, 04:39:44 UTC 8 years ago

Yay! I loves me my Snucius! Great job. :-)

[info]lifeinwords

January 26 2004, 05:25:44 UTC 8 years ago

Mmph. Very nice. Brutal and hard-edged with remorse and disgust, but then, I like that sort of thing. *g*

[info]goseaward

January 26 2004, 05:50:11 UTC 8 years ago

I LOVE MY SNUCIUS.

And you always do it so well. :) I opened this hoping it would be, hoping...and yes it was! Oh, God, I loved it.

And Severus being too proud to admit his virginity was just. so. right.

And the way he just...it was too much and then it wasn't, and everybody watching, and....can I have my coherency back, please? You seem to have taken it. :)

[info]wordhouse

January 26 2004, 08:18:08 UTC 8 years ago

Does speechless count as feedback? Damn, that was hot. Wow.

[info]hilarityallen

January 26 2004, 09:12:05 UTC 8 years ago

Loved the end line. I also like Snape's pride being his downfall, in sex as well as everywhere else. Gosh. Terrifying and hot.

[info]electricandroid

January 26 2004, 12:21:10 UTC 8 years ago

I'll get back to you when I find words to describe the perfection in that.

whoa.

[info]reposoir

January 26 2004, 12:36:14 UTC 8 years ago

I was so hoping that it would be Lucius!

The giveaway at the end was good, very good. I liked it. While reading it- in the back of my mind I was wondering if/how the "fucker" would be revealed. And really skinny, virgin!Snape is soooo a bit of a turn on for me. ;)

The rest of my thoughts would involve random wibbling mush, so my main point is that it was sexy. And hot. Two good things.

[info]switchknife

January 26 2004, 14:08:57 UTC 8 years ago

Virgin!Snape. *moans incoherently* Yes, oh Merlin, YES. Loved the evilness of this, the shame mixed with pleasure mixed with pain, all so lovely and, of course, fucking HOT. The laughter at the edges of it, the mocking, derisive laughter, only made it all the hotter.

He found himself looking down between his own arms, watching his prick jerk and spill the long pearly strands of come across the stone.

!#!&*#^!.

I don't know why, but this sentence is the HOTTEST OF THEM ALL. Just the... *gulp*... just the... image of it...

*stumbles away, weak-kneed and whimpering*

[info]amanuensis1

January 26 2004, 17:48:52 UTC 8 years ago

Oh, YUM. Yes, yes, yes! God, from Severus doing the "HOW did I get myself into this?" to the lovely dirtiness of the language (Naked and fucked up the arse by someone he couldn't even see.) to the sweet ah you drew out of me at the end. Loved it.

[info]raveninthewind

January 26 2004, 19:00:02 UTC 8 years ago

Whoah. Hotness.

I can believe this version of Severus's first time. Dang. Noncon's not usually my kink, but this was...wow. Very hot.

[info]venivincere

January 29 2004, 21:19:01 UTC 8 years ago

Oooh, Sparrow you've left me moaning. This was delicious! I really liked how he thought Lucius had left him to his fate, then realized it was him behind the mask, fucking him. A nice little tinge of romance to a very dark first time.

[info]icarusinwax

February 19 2004, 20:29:28 UTC 8 years ago

*clutches desk* holy fuck.wow. that was hot and i loved the pale, slender fingers bit *shivers* i get way too much of a kick out of non con. lovely work

[info]dancing_moon

February 19 2004, 21:56:03 UTC 8 years ago

Gnh. I thought, maybe, is it... and it was! Ah, short powerful and so sad. Goodfic, mhm!

[info]ntamara

February 19 2004, 23:54:06 UTC 8 years ago

oh, this one is harsh and dirty, I like it *g*

I've rec'd it on my journal in today's 5xSnape, just so you know :)

Anonymous

July 10 2004, 05:43:51 UTC 7 years ago

Eep.

I've read this something like 10 times since you wrote it, and it still makes my knees go weak and my vision go a little fuzzy. It's just so hot! And the way the tension builds, and builds and builds-- I get little sympathetic quivers as I near the end, and then at the last sentence, I'm as thrilled as Snape probably would be. Fucking fantastic.

[info]phenixliang

May 16 2005, 04:17:14 UTC 7 years ago

YUMMY! Loved it! Loved it! Loved it! I couldn't help grinning when I reached the last line, You're wonderful!!!Slender, pale fingers. And on the third finger, a silver ring, in the shape of a serpent, bearing the Malfoy crest.

[info]sparrohawk

July 11 2005, 06:08:59 UTC 6 years ago

Thank you! I'm running horrifically late on my replies, here, but I wanted to be sure to tell you I appreciated the comment :) I'm sorry I'm so behind.

[info]cyntilla

April 28 2006, 07:16:50 UTC 6 years ago

Mmmmh...
Delicious.
Purrrrfect!
More Snucius, please! >____

[info]sparrohawk

July 10 2006, 15:30:17 UTC 5 years ago

I'm terribly late with my responses, but thanks so much for the feedback! It's much appreciated. I have some older Snucius stories on my website, but I'm afraid the only new stuff I've done is in drabble form. Hoping to rectify that, however.

[info]lorwett

August 27 2009, 21:41:31 UTC 2 years ago

^^

really good.. a bit predictable, but even that is for the best))

especially i like your snape character.. always a man in a mission;>lol

[info]sparrohawk

August 31 2009, 23:30:18 UTC 2 years ago

Re: ^^

Thanks!
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